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Dear Skitty,Thanks for your support!Dear Nicolas,OK, it's clear that you aren't too comfortable with the idea of changing your poem and the decision is all yours. I would just ask you to do this: Try to look at the poem like a stranger reading it for the first time (which is what Kat will be). Does it say everything you want it to say to that reader? If yes, then great. If not, then perhaps a few additions could make a big difference. All the things you explained in your last post are helpful--but will the reader get this? If yes, then great. If not.... We won't be adding commentary after the poems, so the poem itself basically has to say it all. I think what you mean by "One" is especially mysterious and might benefit from a little verbal support.I don't think you saw what I meant about the first line. The question mark is just fine, but if you look again you'll see the line starts with a quotation mark, but there isn't another one closing the quote--did you mean to do this?Again, I really like it! You are the poet and have to decide what's best for your creation.Gary